WALT: Use adjectives (describing words) to make our writing interesting to the reader.
We pretended we were a soldier in the war, using our senses to describe what it was like.
I saw...soldiers shooting guns and shooting at lots of people.
I heard...blasting guns killing people.
I felt...red gluely sticky blood on my skin.
I wondered...what soldiers are died in the war.
To Chrystal,
ReplyDeleteYour felt sentence is very descriptive making me feel not just blood on my skin but red gluey sticky blood on me. Have a look at your I saw sentence. You have used shooting twice can you change one of them to make it more interesting? How could you change that sentence?
From Mrs Head
To Chrystal
ReplyDeleteYour writing is amazing but your I wondered sentence doesn't make sense. If you write what to which and took out are.
From Adarshita